Pass the Peanuts

10/14/11

“Look at the plumpies on her, Dallas,” Travis said. “Makes me wanna stick my head between ‘em and–“

I raised my hand. “Don’t talk about my sister that way.”

He looked from me to her to me again. “Man, I’m sorry, I had no idea. You two look nothing alike.”

“I was adopted.”

“That right?” He trawled the bowl of peanuts. “They say bar snacks are spiked with traces of urine, you believe it?”

“Where’s the money, Travis?” I asked.

“You didn’t get my message?” He popped a peanut in his mouth.

“Nope.”

“Something came up. I’m a little short.”

“How short?”

“I got nothing.”

I leveled my eyes at him. “Harry isn’t gonna like this.”

“So what should I do, rob a bank?”

“I wasted the whole day driving out here.”

“Leave the stuff with me, I’ll pay you next week. You know I’m good for it.”

“No, I do not know that.”

Travis shrugged. “Whatever, man. Harry don’t like it, he can find someone else to do business with.”

“I gotta make a phone call,” I said.

I went outside and checked my messages. Nothing from Travis, the lying sack of shit. I called Harry.

“Yo, Dallas,” he said.

“Travis says he’s broke.”

Silence.

“What do you want me to do?” I asked.

“You know what to do.”

I went back inside, half expecting to find that Travis had hightailed it out the back door. But he sat on the same stool, shoveling peanuts into his mouth and drinking a Bud Light. I sat down next to him.

“Chick ain’t your sister, man,” Travis said. “I asked.”

I smiled and put my hands up. “Ya got me.”

“What’d Harry say?”

“He left it up to my discretion.”

“Great,” Travis said. “Leave the shit here. Give me a week and I’ll pay you back, with interest.”

I summoned the bartender. “Fat Tire,” I said.

He set a bottle in front of me and I drank while Travis continued wheedling. I drained the bottle quickly and laid a ten on the bar. “I’m parked out back,” I said.

“We’re cool then?” Travis said. “Thanks, man.”

He followed across the dirt lot, empty except for my truck. I unlocked the passenger door and reached under the seat. I could feel Travis right up on me. “Christ, back the hell up,” I said.

“Sorry, man.”

My hand passed over the leather briefcase and found the 9mm. I turned around and pointed it at Travis.

“The fuck?” he said, eyes locked on the gun.

“I’m not gonna shoot you, Travis. But I am gonna teach you a lesson.”

He dodged to the left but I slammed the gun along the side of his head before he could get out of my reach. He crumpled to the ground.

“This is from Harry,” I said, kicking him in the stomach. “And this is from me, jackass, for making me come all the way out to bum fuck Egypt.” Travis curled up in a ball, shielding his head and face with his arms.

I felt the bullet rip into my chest a split second before I heard it fire. I cried out and dropped my gun, staggering backward against the truck and slid to the ground.

“Goddammit, Travis,” a female said. “Get his gun!” It was the woman from the bar. She hurried toward us, “plumpies” bouncing.

She picked it up herself. Travis got to his feet and she handed it to him. “Where’s the stuff?” she said.

“You heard her, where is it?” Travis said, pointing the gun at me with a shaky hand. He kicked my foot.

Before I could answer, the woman grabbed the brief case from under the seat.

“I got it,” she said. She tried the locks. “What’s the combination?”

Sirens wailed in the distance. She waved her gun at me. “What’s the mother-fucking combination?”

I coughed. Blood spewed from my mouth and down my chin.

Travis seemed to come to his senses. “Ricki, we gotta go!”

As my consciousness faded, I watched Ricki and Travis run off with the case.

Harry is definitely not gonna like this.

~ fin ~

Headshot Holly West No BG2022

Holly West (she/her) is the author of the Mistress of Fortune historical mystery series and the Anthony Award-winning editor of Murder-A-Go-Go’s: Crime Fiction Inspired by the Music of the Go-Go’s and Killin’ Time in San Diego, the 2023 Bouchercon anthology.

Not a word of dialogue doesn't ring true. Nice work. And I thought I could picture a man in uniform saying "plumpies."
PATTI ABBOTT
October 15, 2011
Very nice, author. I want hoping for more. Time to throw in a "cheechism"
Harold
October 14, 2011
Nicely done, Holly. I love the dialogue! Looking forward to reading your story in Needle Magazine... and all the others that I'm hoping will pop up now and again.
Sabrina Ogden
October 14, 2011
Loved it. Glad Travis is still alive and well causing trouble in the world.
Travis Richardson
October 14, 2011
This is slick -- and what tight dialogue.
Chris Rhatigan
October 14, 2011
That's the last time I walk outside of a bar with you! Great job!
Stephen Buehler
October 14, 2011
That was a hell of a good read, Holly! I always like seeing the lesser scumbags get the upperhand
Keith
October 14, 2011
Sounds like a kids toy, those plumpies. Expect 'em to squeak when you squeeze 'em. Despite the tendency to stop and admire 'em, the story ripped me away and made me finish it. Logical and quick. Everybody did what they had to do. Nice twist with the sister being the sister. Reinforces the old saw about where nice guys finish. Cool.
AJ Hayes
October 14, 2011
Loved it!
Paul D Brazill
October 14, 2011
Wasn't expecting that. Great stuff!
Joe Myers
October 14, 2011
I like to squeeze plumpies into every story I write.
Holly West
October 14, 2011
Thanks, Josh! I got "plumpies" from an episode of The King of Queens, but I sure wish I'd come up with it myself.
Holly West
October 14, 2011
Nice work, Holly! Great twisty turny action. And plumpies!
Glenn Gray
October 14, 2011
Great! Love the turn of events. Super dialogue.
Fiona Johnson
October 14, 2011
Great story, Holly...he should've seen it coming!
Thomas Pluck
October 14, 2011
Nice! A good dollop of bad ass. Where ever did you come up with "plumpies"???
Josh Stallings
October 14, 2011
really nifty story with flawless prose and neat, understated dialogue. just good writing. loved the ending too.
eva dolan
October 14, 2011

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