Small Separations

06/10/11

I didn’t give the guy much for it. Couple of bucks trade-in on a cheap Bowie copy.

It looked like the kind of box they keep machinist’s straight edges in.

Grain worn walnut with leather hinges. Inside, red padded silk surrounded a six-inch wedge of heavy, polished steel, narrow and razored along the bottom. It looked like a fat straight razor without the handle. There was an odor also. Like the smell of ice or the aroma of snow — or the acrid nerve jangle scent of chloroform.

There was a number engraved along the top of the wedged blade: Stucky Model 1006A .

One day, when business was slow and we got bored enough, Gabe and I looked Stucky up online. Wasn’t much there except an 800 number. A gal with a sandy voice answered the phone.

When we asked about Model 1006A she warmed right up.

“One of our best sellers,” she said. “Best small separation steel on the market.”

“Small separation? What’s that?”

“Oh you know, she said “It’s not heavy enough for the big jobs like wrists or feet, but surgeons and EMTs prefer it for the small stuff. Like fingers and toes, little bones, you know?”

We told her thank you and hung up.

“Well,” Gabe said, “imagine that.”

“Yeah, that’s really . . . yeah.” I said.

A shaft of sunlight splintered red along the steel as I closed the box.

We started that night. Cats at first. Then big dogs. Then . . ..

When we finally found her, her screams weren’t sandy at all. There were a lot of them, the screams. A lot of blood. It took a while.

All those small separations take time.

~ fin ~

AJ Hayes was a talented, nurturing writer who flourished in the short story medium. Known for hard tack stories that were lean and without an ounce of waste. He flourished writing short stories, and as much as he enjoyed writing the brutal tale, he was more than ready to lend a supporting word. AJ Hayes lived in a small town near San Diego, California where there is no mafia . . . now.

That was awesome.
Bruce
June 23, 2011
Oooooooooozes, Fedora Man. ~ Absolutely*Kate
Absolutely*Kate
June 19, 2011
There's a difference between a gritty & sandy scream, eh, AJ? Sick Puppy. The words separation and splintered is what did for me in this story. Lovely, sick build up.
Jodi
June 14, 2011
Thanks Christopher. Means a lot.
AH Hayes
June 13, 2011
Thanks Col. I'll try to stay sharp.
AJ Hayes
June 13, 2011
I'm in complete agreement with the rest of those that have commented here. AJ, you know how to take something and, in a few words, just kick the shit out your reader's mind. And, yeah, in a good way. This is what noir and crime all should be. Short and brutal and where all the pieces fit.
Christopher Grant
June 12, 2011
Well done! Surprising amount of material in a very small space. For a 'less is more' tale, that was extremely good.
Trey R. Barker
June 12, 2011
Top notch, AJ. Very cutting. Best, Col
Col Bury
June 12, 2011
Oh that was a creepy, chilling little tale AJ!
Julia Madeleine
June 11, 2011
Love how the pace of the story matches the subject. And first-rate writing. Though what else would I expect from Mr Hayes!
Chris Rhatigan
June 10, 2011
Sweet sorrow . . . AARRGGHHH . . . excuse me I must go and beat my head against the floor for a while now. Good'un, mate.
AJ hayes
June 10, 2011
Thanks everyone. Now I gotta go get a new door so's my head will fit though it. Privilege to be on Shotgun Honey, Such a class place.
AJ Hayes
June 10, 2011
great the way you lower the temperature to a chill. reading your work is sometimes like being trapped in a meat-locker - for a while, you think you can take it, then you realise there just isn't going to be a way out. i'm going to give you a commercial here, gratis - Small Separations; because parting is such sweet sorrow. nigel
nigel bird
June 10, 2011
Love me a good knife story. The details are wonderful, the pace perfect.
June 10, 2011
AJ takes a sclapel to the vein and opens it slowly. Each word each line a puncture mark like a slow tide of ruination, great piece of writing.
Richard Godwin
June 10, 2011
lean and mean. and great sensory overload in that third paragraph to bring you in.
davidjameskeaton
June 10, 2011
Those poor cats and dogs. Nicely done, AJ.
Sabrina Ogden
June 10, 2011
Slips all the way into horror, that one. I especially liked the line about nerve-jangling chloroform.
garkim
June 10, 2011
Slipped all the way into horror, that one did. I especially liked the line about 'nerve-jangling' chloroform.
garkim
June 10, 2011
I hope these guys are on Pawn Stars sometime... I wanna see more of these creepy bastards! Nice one, cut to the bone...
tpluck
June 10, 2011
Love that last line!
Brad Green
June 10, 2011
What a deliciously chilling read. They made sure that little item was used for the purpose for which it was intended!
Joyce Juzwik
June 10, 2011
Splendid. Research has its uses,eh?
Paul D Brazill
June 10, 2011
Absolutely terrific. I loved the way you built the sense of menace throughout the story then hit hard with that brutal ending. Gave me a real honest-to-goodness chill, that one!
Julie Lewthwaite
June 10, 2011
Blimey, AJ. Loved the way you maintained control of the pace on this one, then unleashed the ending like a steel bar to the face. Muchly enjoyed, mate.
Ian Ayris
June 10, 2011

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