The Hole

09/07/11

Only a pin prick of light makes it this far into the hole. It’s calm and quiet this deep. I like it here. But then the whole world jumps into my hole. All of it. It comes rushing past my head, all in my face and my eyes and then it’s everywhere around me and the hole is gone, the calmness torn away.

Where the hell am I? What’s that goddamn noise? It sounds like meteors are raining down nearby. Sickening crashes shake the ground and send waves of fire through my head. There’s burning light, dazzling even when my eyes are closed. I shield my face with my hand. Lifting my arm causes more flames to lick at me, across my flank now. I know those flames, I’ve faced them before. They’re the flames of cracked ribs. Another crash rings out, then another, and I can’t help but cringe. It sounds like a giant stamping in fury. Crushing buildings underfoot.

Tiny peeks through my fingers, a little at a time, and eventually my sight starts to come back. I’m slumped in the corner of some kind of metal cell, maybe a storage tanker. There’s nothing else in here except for the light, which is ridiculously bright and fastened inside a cage on the ceiling. I try to stand, with a notion of smashing the light bulb but before I can straighten up my knees give way. I’m face down on the metal and I’m falling back into the hole.

***

I was chasing the bastard. Robert goddamn Hoover. He killed Carol, all because she just happened to walk around the corner at the moment he chose to slap a hooker across the face. Carol being Carol, no way could she leave it, not even when the whore was clearly his own. She marched on over and slapped him right back.

From across the street I watched from my car as that worthless pimp punched my wife in the jaw. Froze in horror as she fell and split her head on the curb like a piece of fruit. Stared numbly as he ran, dragging the hooker behind him like a doll.

She’d just finished work. I’d recently gotten a raise and we were going to a restaurant to celebrate. Instead all I could do was watch her die.

A policeman told me Hoover’s name. He said they were looking but admitted that had it been his wife he’d want a different kind of vengeance. He winked, told me the name of a bar.

I went with a crowbar. Found him right away. He saw me coming though, did a runner. The chased lasted ten minutes, through one dingy alleyway after another. He ducked in the side door of an abandoned warehouse. I followed but it was dark and the floor was slippery. Maybe I fell and knocked my head or maybe somebody hit me. Either way I ended up in the hole.

***

The world jumps in the hole again. It hurts even more than last time.

Another crash then a voice. “Who the fuck are you?”

“Hoover?” The word feels like rust on my tongue. Tastes like it too.

“How do you know my name?” Another crash booms around me. It’s no giant, no meteors. It’s him hitting the side of the tanker with my crowbar.

“You killed my wife you spineless prick.”

“Oh. Ah, yeah.” Another crash. “I see.”

“Let me out of here. What are you afraid of? You’ll fight with women, so why not have a go with me?”

“Talk all you want, man, it ain’t gonna help.” Another crash. “You’re going to die in there you know that?”

“Fuck you. I’ll kill you.” I pound my fist against the metal, over and over. I scream and swear about all the things I’m going to do to him. My head is wrapped in fire again and my ribs are singing but I don’t care. I hammer on the metal and scream until I’m hoarse and my fist is bloody and tears stream down my cheeks.

There are no more crashes, no voice, no matter how much I scream and pound.

I didn’t even hear him leave.

~ fin ~

Martin Garrity is a psychology graduate, wargamer, metalhead, sci-fi geek, and more. He lives in Mansfield, England. He writes modern noir in a variety of forms and can be found online at Solarcide.com. His work has been featured by We Are Vespertine, Pulp Metal, and Thunderdome. He is a member of The Cult Writer’s Workshop.

Can't really say more than anybody else already has about this. A really good read.
Chris Wiles
September 21, 2011
Hit me right in the gut. Solid, hardboiled entertainment.
Mike Miner
September 08, 2011
Brutal and claustrophobic read. Well done.
Glenn Gray
September 08, 2011
Wow - many thanks guys, all of you. Right now I am humbled. Glad to be here :)
Martin Garrity
September 07, 2011
Nice job setting the scene here. And while we root for him to make Hoover pay, reality is rarely that satisfying.
John Kenyon
September 07, 2011
Yep. You open a door, you'd better be ready for what comes through it. My, that was good!
AJ Hayes
September 07, 2011
Dark and brutal. We all like revenge tales but in reality this is a more likely story.
Thomas Pluck
September 07, 2011
Damn, is there no justice in this world?
Chad Rohrbacher
September 07, 2011
A storage tanker is a great idea to drop a narrator into and let him boil over with rage. Storing up anger for another installment hopefully?
David James Keaton
September 07, 2011
Man, that's brutal. Sharp writing, too.
Chris Rhatigan
September 07, 2011
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September 07, 2011
Harsh. Things just never go to plan. Cracking story. Really, really well done.
Paul D Brazill
September 07, 2011

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